SusanWritesPrecise

Other Women

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Other women get flowers from their lovers.
You bring me
ice packs for my
swollen, ugly face.
I tell them I
fell down the stairs.
But there are no stairs leading anywhere
except
to the Abyss where
love used to live.

You said you wouldn’t
hurt me again.
Other women would leave;
I bought a gun.

 

 

 


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38 responses to “Other Women”

  1. V.J. Knutson Avatar

    Edgy…I like it!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thanks so much, V.J.!

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      1. V.J. Knutson Avatar

        You are welcome

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  2. kanzensakura Avatar

    Seems like it would be simpler just to call the police, file charges, and leave.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      So the last line would’ve been, “I called the cops.” Have you ever been in an abusive relationship? Calling the cops can get you killed.

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  3. peterfrankiswrites Avatar

    A whole lot of story in these few lines. Great stuff.

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  4. Frank Hubeny Avatar

    I like how you described this: “to the Abyss where
    love used to live”

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  5. Jeff Dunmyre Avatar
    Jeff Dunmyre

    Payback is Hell. Give ’em Hell!!!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thanks, Jeff! I did. :-)

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  6. Somewhere Sea Avatar

    Edgy, yes–and so, so heartbreaking.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Much appreciated, Leslie.

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      1. Somewhere Sea Avatar

        I hold you in my heart <3

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  7. Somewhere Sea Avatar

    Also, the cover image of your book, along with the title, makes it one I’d pick up from a display :)

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      1. Somewhere Sea Avatar

        Most welcome :)

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  8. kim881 Avatar

    Having been to that ‘Abyss where love used to live’ way back in the past, I’d never want to go there again. Thank goodness guns aren’t so easy to procure in the UK or there’d be a lot of dead men.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Hi kim881. It’s definitely not on my bucket list either. :-) Thanks for stopping by!

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  9. sanaarizvi Avatar
    sanaarizvi

    Ooh this is edgy! The end took me by surprise… well serves him right!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Sanaarizvi!

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  10. anmol(alias HA) Avatar

    Oh, this is scary — to wield a weapon for one’s safety is powerful but the intermittent danger makes it so sad too.
    -HA

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thanks, HA. It was kind of scary to write, to put myself in that situation. Yikes!

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  11. msjadeli Avatar

    “other women get flowers but you bring me ice packs” says so much. i’ve been there and i’m sorry if you’ve had to go through that. buying a gun and they know you have it is a necessary step in some situations. very powerful poem

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you msjadeli. I’m sorry you had to endure such abuse. You’re in my prayers. I’m glad you stopped by!

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      1. msjadeli Avatar

        thank you for your well-wishing and thank you for honoring the experience of victims fighting back with your poem

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      2. The Abject Muse Avatar

        I wish I had more to fight back with.

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  12. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    There is no end to this… the only other options is to run away I think… I hope that such men are exceptions, but it seems to be more common than we think

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Yes, Bjorn. We have to be vigilant and watch for the warning signs. Still, running away means you’re always looking over your shoulder. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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  13. therisa Avatar
    therisa

    Sadly, I have spent too years, living in the Abyss, with one particular family member. Who did everything but sexually rape me. Only by moving away to another part of Ontario, have I escaped his physical presence in my life. And yes, there were times, I wanted to kill him. Especially, on those nights, I am struggling with PTSD flashbacks.

    Thank you, for expressing the anger that many abuse victims suppress. I do hope that this has helped you, in your own healing process.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      I’m sorry to hear about your time in the Abyss. Therisa. It took guts to leave and I applaud you for that. Thanks for stopping by and take good care!

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  14. Lona Gynt Avatar

    Ice packs…
    even if he brought flowers, it wouldn’t mean he would change, anyone willing hit or shove will do it again. Run run run, but that is hard to do. Good to recognize no one should have to put up with this. Powerful write!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you Lona. You are exactly right.

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  15. Dragon Warrior Avatar

    In such few lines you expressed such vastness! It’s amazing!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Much appreciated, Dragon Warrior!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, pattimouse!

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