aka, The Abject Muse

SusanWritesPrecise/Susan Marie Shuman

Hunger

It’s Open Link Night at the dVerse Poets Pub!

Look at me and smile

that smile; make my heart beat like

velvet jackhammers

again and whisper

my name like it is holy.

 

Feed the obsession.

 

SusanWritesPrecise/ Susan Marie Shuman
the-conscious-mind.com

 

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19 responses to “Hunger”

  1. Jane Dougherty Avatar
    Jane Dougherty

    The line breaks in are spot on. They add so much to the words.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Jane! :-)

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      1. Jane Dougherty Avatar
        Jane Dougherty

        :)

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  2. Vashti Q Avatar
    Vashti Q

    Great duo of haiku! The picture is wonderful too! :D

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Vashti!

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  3. Gina Avatar
    Gina

    velvet jackhammers – soft blows that cause internal damage

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    1. Lona Gynt Avatar
      Lona Gynt

      Or internal glow I think rather

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  4. The Abject Muse Avatar
    The Abject Muse

    Hey, good point! I hadn’t thought of that, but that is exactly what happens! Thank you Gina.

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  5. rob kistner Avatar
    rob kistner

    So passionate Susan… :-)

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Rob!

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  6. Frank Hubeny Avatar
    Frank Hubeny

    Very nice ending.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Frank!

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  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    Velvet jackhammers… brilliant.

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  8. The Abject Muse Avatar
    The Abject Muse

    Thanks, Bjorn…unless you are being facetious. :-)

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  9. Mish Avatar
    Mish

    Oh my, I like the contrast of velvet with the strength of jackhammers… softening each beat.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Mish. I appreciate your comments! :-)

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  10. Lona Gynt Avatar
    Lona Gynt

    What can I say, not much when left a tad breathless, 💜 this. My sweetie has asked what I want for Christmas, I think I will use this poem as my wish list, sadly though, she says Santa has me on the mostly naughty list. Wonderful writing Susan!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Lona! You’ve just given me one of the nicest compliments ever. I am honored and I hope you get exactly what you want from “Santa.”

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      1. Lona Gynt Avatar
        Lona Gynt

        Hoping 🙋🏻‍♀️

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