aka, The Abject Muse

Your Space

It’s Quadrille Monday at the dVerse Poets Pub! The writing prompt is “Kiss.”

What would it be like

I wonder,

to count the gold

flecks in your

hazel eyes and smell

the fabric

softener of your shirt,

to be in your space.

Utter perfection!

And if we

(just for a moment)

were close enough

to kiss

one kiss.

 

 

SusanWritesPrecise/ Susan Marie Shuman
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22 responses to “Your Space”

  1. whimsygizmo Avatar
    whimsygizmo

    I love the simplicity and comfort of that fabric softener, especially.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks, whimsy!

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  2. crimsonprose Avatar
    crimsonprose

    Apart from the fabric softener, which would start off an asthma event, I loved it. Especially the gold flecks in the hazel eyes. :)

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, crimson!

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  3. kim881 Avatar
    kim881

    A poignant quadrille, Susan, especially the smell of fabric softener on a shirt, which makes me wonder why there is too much space between them for a kiss.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      She likes him more than he likes her. Glad you enjoyed, Kim! :-)

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  4. anmol(alias HA) Avatar
    anmol(alias HA)

    “to be in your space”: This is what drives the need for romance and intimacy. I love how sublimely you put the idea across.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, HA. Very much appreciated!

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  5. robtkistner Avatar
    robtkistner

    Remember, you don’t want a goodlooking kisser, they just pose Susan. Find s kisser who really likes to subtle ceremony and sweet sensuality of bestowing the kiss. It will rock your world and change your,lif! It will be the most sensationnal experience of your lif

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      It certainly is. Thank you rob!

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  6. lillian Avatar
    lillian

    “What would it be like,
    I wonder, to count the gold
    flecks in your
    hazel eyes and smell
    the fabric
    softener of your shirt,
    to be in your space.”

    These are just perfect details to make the reader really wonder…..That’s a romanticized closeness that comes with a desire and yearning. :)

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Lillian. That’s exactly what I was aiming for. :-)

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  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    I really love how you brought in the scent…
    and the simplicity of fabric softener (long time since I used that)

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks, Bjorn. The olfactory sense plays such a huge role in attraction, I just had to toss it in there. :-)

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      1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
        Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

        It actually once played a big role for me… thank your for the memory

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, crushed caramel! I am going to give this a shot. :-)

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  9. Frank Hubeny Avatar
    Frank Hubeny

    I like defining one’s space by smell.

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  10. katiemiafrederick Avatar
    katiemiafrederick

    Kissing
    Close
    Kissing
    Far Kissing
    Never at all But Heart..:)

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  11. annell4 Avatar
    annell4

    That what dreams are made of.

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    1. annell4 Avatar
      annell4

      I meant, “that’s what dreams are made of.”

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    2. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      They sure are! Thanks Annell.

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