Susan Marie Shuman/SusanWritesPrecise

Almost Life

It’s Prosery Monday at the dVerse Poets Pub!

“Prosery is the latest addition to the dVerse universe. This is the fourth prosery prompt. If you’re not yet acquainted with the dVerse term, let me explain. It is a flash fiction (of any genre) that incorporates a line from a poem—prose from poetry! It must be no more than 144 words. The line of the poem is “These memories were left here with the trees”


All the years we spent pretending that somehow it would all work out. We’d be together, you & me. You’d promised to leave Estelle when the kids were old enough. I pretended to believe you until I finally did. And so I waited.  I waited even after your kids had kids of their own. Our unborn children waited with me. Eventually though, their little souls grew tired and they moved on.

O, how I loved our champagne and moonlight trysts! Right over there beneath that weeping willow. Remember the time you were going to carve our initials its trunk? But I wouldn’t let you for fear of hurting it.

Now I wish I hadn’t stopped you. Damn it! What I wouldn’t give…but it was not to be.

These memories live here with the trees; memories of the life we almost had.

 

 

SusanWritesPrecise

19 responses to “Almost Life”

  1. So sad–an old and familiar story. I like how you worked the prompt line in.

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    1. Thanks so much, Merril. :-)

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      1. You’re welcome!

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  2. Tim Philippart Avatar
    Tim Philippart

    many hesitancies and regrets —- don’t we all— wonderfully coveyed

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    1. Thanks so much, Tim. Much appreciated!

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  3. Hope stays alive and the years pass…

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    1. Very true, Lisa. Sad but true. Thanks!

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      1. You’re welcome.

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  4. Not just memories living with the trees, regrets bend branches too. Nicely done, Susan.

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    1. I like that Kim, regrets bending branches. Wish I’d thought of it! :-)

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  5. I feel this is a story that is told over and over… convenience for him being paid for by her… and then he dies.

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    1. Yeah, the guy always gets to die first, too.

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  6. So sad..I love the line about the kids you never had. Well done.

    Only one problem. It may just be me but i find it almost impossible to read the words agains the black background. I wonder if anyone else has the same problem. In a longer piece, I would have had to have given up..

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  7. Rob Kistner Avatar
    Rob Kistner

    Excellent writing Susan ! Good use of the prompt line. Enjoyed reading this, sad though. Two great pics!

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  8. Now that’s a sad story, but we often see what we want to see even when we know it’s a mirage. (K)

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  9. This time-worn situation is so sad, and sometimes you waits a lifetime. I know people this has happened to. Wonderful piece, Susan.

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    1. Thank you, purple one. :-)

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