Ergo, the Ogre

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It’s Quadrille Monday over at the dVerse Poets Pub! Today’s task is to create a poem of 44 words using the word, fill.

 

It was mid-July when I saw you

for the first time.

Stars dazzle the midnight

sky but quickly fade

compared

to the stars in my eyes.

Your voice like

warm scotch:

smooth

rich

velvet.

The moon

full and bursting

gold.

You hung it,

yes?

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Susan Marie Shuman is an author and freelance writer/editor who currently resides in the wilds of Birmingham, AL. She shares her life with two spoiled cats, several friends (not all of them imaginary) and one husband. When she’s not working, Susan enjoys horseback riding, reading, taking her cats for a spin in their pet stroller, and taking naps. An ex-bartender, recovering crash test dummy, and all-around late bloomer, Susan graduated from the University of South Alabama in 2004 with a BA in English. She minored in Russian. Long-range goals include visiting Israel, the Czech Republic and Liechtenstein. Susan is also planning to launch a micronation which would be called either Suzannistan or Eastern Suzanorovia.

15 responses to “Dazzled”

  1. Frank Hubeny Avatar
    Frank Hubeny

    I like your comparison to stars at midnight to stars in one’s eyes.

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  2. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    When I was a young boy I was convinced that my father had hung up the moon…

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      I always thought my mom hung it when I was little. Turns out I was right :-)

      Reply
  3. Yvonne Osborne Avatar
    Yvonne Osborne

    A voice like warm scotch….sigh

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Yeah. That *does* sound nice, doesn’t it?

      Reply
  4. hank77 Avatar
    hank77

    kaykuala

    The moon full and bursting gold.
    You hung it, yes?

    The moon helping out on the occasion, apparently!

    Hank

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Indeed, Hank!

      Reply
  5. M. A Morris Avatar
    M. A Morris

    loved that last line.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, M.A. Much appreciated.

      Reply
  6. kim881 Avatar
    kim881

    Beautiful, Susan!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks, Kim! :-)

      Reply
  7. whimsygizmo Avatar
    whimsygizmo

    Oh, that last line surprised and DELIGHTED me!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      So glad you enjoyed, WhimsyG!

      Reply
  8. revivedwriter Avatar
    revivedwriter

    You end your poem with such a striking and interesting question! I like this.

    Reply
    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks so much, revivedwriter!

      Reply

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