aka, The Abject Muse

SusanWritesPrecise

Dazzled

It’s Quadrille Monday over at the dVerse Poets Pub! Today’s task is to create a poem of 44 words using the word, fill.

 

It was mid-July when I saw you

for the first time.

Stars dazzle the midnight

sky but quickly fade

compared

to the stars in my eyes.

Your voice like

warm scotch:

smooth

rich

velvet.

The moon

full and bursting

gold.

You hung it,

yes?

 

 

 

 

 

 

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15 responses to “Dazzled”

  1. revivedwriter Avatar
    revivedwriter

    You end your poem with such a striking and interesting question! I like this.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks so much, revivedwriter!

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  2. whimsygizmo Avatar
    whimsygizmo

    Oh, that last line surprised and DELIGHTED me!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      So glad you enjoyed, WhimsyG!

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  3. kim881 Avatar
    kim881

    Beautiful, Susan!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks, Kim! :-)

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  4. M. A Morris Avatar
    M. A Morris

    loved that last line.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, M.A. Much appreciated.

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  5. hank77 Avatar
    hank77

    kaykuala

    The moon full and bursting gold.
    You hung it, yes?

    The moon helping out on the occasion, apparently!

    Hank

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Indeed, Hank!

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  6. Yvonne Osborne Avatar
    Yvonne Osborne

    A voice like warm scotch….sigh

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Yeah. That *does* sound nice, doesn’t it?

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  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    When I was a young boy I was convinced that my father had hung up the moon…

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      I always thought my mom hung it when I was little. Turns out I was right :-)

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  8. Frank Hubeny Avatar
    Frank Hubeny

    I like your comparison to stars at midnight to stars in one’s eyes.

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