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Among the Hazelwood

It’s Prosery Monday over at the dVerse Poets Pub. This week, our prompt comes from a Yeats poem, The Song of the Wandering Aengus: I went out to the hazel wood,
Because a fire was in my head’.
144 words.

It was a day like any other. Nothing special or noteworthy aside from it was the day you left. I looked everywhere I thought you might be and eventually even places I knew you’d never go.

Were you kidnapped? Amnesia? Tired of me and wanted a new life? Perhaps you’d met someone new.

You should’ve said goodbye unless you didn’t know you were going.

Two days passed. I went out to the hazelwood because a fire was in my head; memories burning.

Remember when our love was new, we’d walk amongst the trees and talk about our future? Suddenly, I knew if you were anywhere, it was among the hazelwood. And there it was: the very tree in which you’d carved our initials.

A balmy breeze shimmered the leaves on the hazel branches and gently ruffled your hair as your lifeless body hung, swaying.


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17 responses to “Among the Hazelwood”

  1. Chel Owens Avatar

    Dang. Evocative and creepy.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Chelle! That’s exactly what I was after. :-)

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  2. Helen Dehner Avatar

    OH NO … chills, chills and more chills right now. Epic prose!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you much, Helen. :-)

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  3. The Abject Muse Avatar

    Thank you so much, Helen. Glad you enjoyed!

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  4. Dora Avatar

    The dark ending caught me off guard, and the pain of the narrator’s discovery — that last descriptive touch of the wind “gently ruffled your hair” — is terribly sad. Wonderful prosery.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you very much, Dora. :-)

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  5. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    Oh … such a very tragic ending… we both went to find death in the copse of hazelwood…

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  6. sanaarizvi Avatar
    sanaarizvi

    This is incredibly dark and resonant. Sometimes the decisions we make in life fail to coincide with those that fate has in store for us. I have learned that the hard way ❤️

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  7. rogblog666 Avatar

    wow what an ending. the line does lead us down the lane to such places

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  8. kim881 Avatar

    Oh, my goodness, Susan, you went dark with this one, and you kept your reader on tenterhooks until the tragic ending! I love the calmness of the narrator all the way through, which caused the hairs on my arms to stand on end when I read the final line, especially the way the balmy breeze gently ruffled the hair of the lifeless body.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thanks, Kim. So glad you enjoyed. I must admit that I am comfy on the dark side. :-)

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  9. rothpoetry Avatar

    Wow! A great story with a sad and compelling ending!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      So glad youn enjoyed! Thanks for stopping by.

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      1. rothpoetry Avatar

        You are welcome

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  10. merrildsmith Avatar

    Oh no! How tragic (and chilling)! The wind ruffled hair is such a fine touch.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thanks, Merril. It just sort of came to me, like the next logical thing to happen. Idk.

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