aka, The Abject Muse

The Road Fork

It’s Poetics Tuesday over at the dVerse Poets Pub. MsJadeLi of the Tao Talk blog is our host. Today our mission is to explore diverging connections between things in poetry. Of the three options, I’ve decided to take a crack at the Diamante poetry form.

Friend

Faithful, Honest

Sharing, Trusting, Caring

Ally, Confidante, Liar, Backstabber

Fighting, Yelling, Hurting

Nasty, Evil

Enemy

I’m not sure how I feel about this piece. I enjoyed trying out a new poetry form, but something feels off. Maybe I didn’t choose the right topic. Or maybe it takes some practice. Thanks, JadeLi!

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14 responses to “The Road Fork”

  1. rogblog666 Avatar
    rogblog666

    i like it i will attempt this form when i have time to concentrate. loved this

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks so much. I appreciate iyour opinion!

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  2. msjadeli Avatar
    msjadeli

    I think you did it just right Susan. What I like about the diamante is that it gets you clarifying what’s in your head about certain ideas and concepts. With your two choices, you probably know right away if you consider someone a friend or an enemy — but why?

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Exactlt, Lisa. Thank you for introducing this poetry form!

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        msjadeli

        You are very welcome!

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  3. sanaarizvi Avatar
    sanaarizvi

    This is beautifully done! Nowadays there is a newer concept of a frenemy which I personally believe is more dangerous. How do we possibly test their loyalty?

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      I agree. You truly do not know who to trust.

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  4. Peter's pondering Avatar
    Peter’s pondering

    I like it!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Peter.

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  5. Ron. Avatar
    Ron.

    I think you did a fine job, and especially so since the “shift” line contains ” confidante / liar” which I think is perfect because so many lies are spoken “in confidence”. My hat’s off.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      My head is swelling. :-) Thank you Ron.

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  6. newepicauthor Avatar
    newepicauthor

    I think if you stick with it, you are bound to get better.

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  7. Ingrid Avatar
    Ingrid

    I think you did well, like Ron said: the turn comes in the middle when you mistake a liar for a confidante. This way we find out who our enemies are!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Ingrid. :-)

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