Submerged

Heeding Haiku With Chèvrefeuille, September 12th 2018 “unfinished”

“… challenge you this week to create the third, missing, line and than write a haibun with that completed haiku in it. Your haibun may have a maximum of 150 words (including the completed haiku).
Here is that unfinished haiku:”

missing a wife
the bamboo grass dives under —
submerged in mourning.

Posted

September 12, 2018

MindLovesMisery Menagerie

Ergo, the Ogre

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Basho Unfinished, Chevrefeuille Haiku, MindLoveMisery’s Menagerie, MLMM

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10 responses to “Submerged”

petrujviljoen

September 13, 2018

The aspect of mourning fits the unfinished haiku so well!

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1. The Abject Muse
  
  September 13, 2018
  
  Thank you! I accidentally finished the wrong Haiku, though. Ooops!
  
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  1. petrujviljoen
    
    September 13, 2018
    
    No, you didn’t.
    
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  2. petrujviljoen
    
    September 13, 2018
    
    Oh! I see what you mean! It reads well though!
    
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  3. The Abject Muse
    
    September 13, 2018
    
    Thanks, petrujviljoen!
    
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Jules

September 13, 2018

It is interesting to see where you went.
We were on similar thoughts.
I created a sort of story without a haibun.

Cheers, Jules

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Jules

September 13, 2018

Sorry Icon does not go to current open site.
Here is the link:
single again

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1. The Abject Muse
  
  September 13, 2018
  
  Thanks, Jules. Our minds were in sync for sure!
  
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Chèvrefeuille

September 14, 2018

A very nice last line. Makes the feeling of missing very strong. Thank you for sharing.

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1. The Abject Muse
  
  September 15, 2018
  
  Thank you, Chev. Much appreciated!
  
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