Heeding Haiku With Chèvrefeuille, September 12th 2018 “unfinished”

“… challenge you this week to create the third, missing, line and than write a haibun with that completed haiku in it. Your haibun may have a maximum of 150 words (including the completed haiku).
Here is that unfinished haiku:”

 

missing a wife
the bamboo grass dives under —
submerged in mourning.

10 responses to “Submerged”

  1. Chèvrefeuille Avatar

    A very nice last line. Makes the feeling of missing very strong. Thank you for sharing.

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Chev. Much appreciated!

  2. Jules Avatar

    Sorry Icon does not go to current open site.
    Here is the link:
    single again

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thanks, Jules. Our minds were in sync for sure!

  3. Jules Avatar

    It is interesting to see where you went.
    We were on similar thoughts.
    I created a sort of story without a haibun.

    Cheers, Jules

  4. petrujviljoen Avatar

    The aspect of mourning fits the unfinished haiku so well!

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you! I accidentally finished the wrong Haiku, though. Ooops!

      1. petrujviljoen Avatar

        No, you didn’t.

      2. petrujviljoen Avatar

        Oh! I see what you mean! It reads well though!

      3. The Abject Muse Avatar

        Thanks, petrujviljoen!

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