Submerged

September 12, 2018

Submerged

Heeding Haiku With Chèvrefeuille, September 12th 2018 “unfinished”

“… challenge you this week to create the third, missing, line and than write a haibun with that completed haiku in it. Your haibun may have a maximum of 150 words (including the completed haiku).
Here is that unfinished haiku:”

missing a wife
the bamboo grass dives under —
submerged in mourning.

Ergo, the Ogre

MindLovesMisery Menagerie

Basho Unfinished, Chevrefeuille Haiku, MindLoveMisery’s Menagerie, MLMM

10 responses to “Submerged”

petrujviljoen

September 13, 2018

The aspect of mourning fits the unfinished haiku so well!

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1. The Abject Muse
  
  September 13, 2018
  
  Thank you! I accidentally finished the wrong Haiku, though. Ooops!
  
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  1. petrujviljoen
    
    September 13, 2018
    
    No, you didn’t.
    
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  2. petrujviljoen
    
    September 13, 2018
    
    Oh! I see what you mean! It reads well though!
    
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  3. The Abject Muse
    
    September 13, 2018
    
    Thanks, petrujviljoen!
    
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Jules

September 13, 2018

It is interesting to see where you went.
We were on similar thoughts.
I created a sort of story without a haibun.

Cheers, Jules

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Jules

September 13, 2018

Sorry Icon does not go to current open site.
Here is the link:
single again

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1. The Abject Muse
  
  September 13, 2018
  
  Thanks, Jules. Our minds were in sync for sure!
  
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Chèvrefeuille

September 14, 2018

A very nice last line. Makes the feeling of missing very strong. Thank you for sharing.

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1. The Abject Muse
  
  September 15, 2018
  
  Thank you, Chev. Much appreciated!
  
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