The prompt at dVerse Poets Pub today is Time and What if?
Remember the night
of the silver midnight moon
when the stars were
bigger and shinier than
they should have been?
What if we’d wished on the
one that had fallen—
a quicksilver flash in the sky—
instead of falling, so easily, ourselves?
What if, instead of
the straight, clear shot, we’d chosen
the other path and strolled it
hand-in-hand?
The winding, rutted, uphill trail
That would’ve given us
pause, to think and
think again.
I like the whole poem, but especially the 2nd stanza, where you parallel the falling star and falling in love. Indeed and the wonder on relationships that have fallen like stars without wishes :(
I like the comparisons you build here, a lovely analogy….and that slow, steep climb is sometimes the better result in love and relationships.
Thank you Mish. I appreciate your comments and so glad you enjoyed. I agree in that the climb and road bumps can make the love that much sweeter.
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Wonderful poem Susan, filled with wishful thinking. We need to always remember, we may have been eaten by a bear on that other path… just saying… ;-) I enjoyed this Susan! HNY 2019
Thank you, Rob. Point well taken, and much appreciated! But like Shelby said in Steel Magnolia’s “…”I’d rather have ten minutes of wonderful than a lifetime of nothing special.” Or something close to that. :-)
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Each no doubt a winding, rutted, uphill trail … just with a different cast of characters?
the thought of taking not a different path but not taking it together has made me pause to think too – a well written contemplative piece –
As someone who often hike mountains, I find this very interesting. Now I’m starting to wonder the what ifs. What if I never met those people in the trails?
Or if you had met different people on different trails. It really is a lot to think about. Thanks for stopping by & commenting!
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Love it… the thought of falling with that star instead of seeking and finding what’s better…. it’s never the easy road is it?
Beautiful direct free verse, each word carefully chosen and paints the picture and the question. So nice. Is the picture an Alabama trail?
Ergo, the Ogre 
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