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Cruel Eclipse

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Star-crossed and in perpetual orbit:

the Moon circling

the Earth circling

the Sun—your heart

beating

the rhythm of my soul.

Enter

the cruel eclipse:

spouses,

children!

(yours, mine

never ours).

Still,

this relentless and

unchangeable love,

our secret conflagration,

longs to burn

out loud.

 

SusanWritesPrecise/ Susan Marie Shuman
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17 responses to “Cruel Eclipse”

  1. Jade M. Wong Avatar
    Jade M. Wong

    This poem just burns with the relentless love it speaks of. Great writing!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks so much, Jade. Really appreciate it! :-)

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  2. msjadeli Avatar
    msjadeli

    smoldering!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you! :-)

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  3. sanaarizvi Avatar
    sanaarizvi

    I fear even love can be cruel at times.. poignant write!

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  4. Frank Hubeny Avatar
    Frank Hubeny

    Nice lines describing a relationship: “(yours, mine

    never ours).”

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Frank. Much appreciated!

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  5. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    The way you combine the cruel with eclipse make me think of the way the light of a love can be murdered by shadows.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      I like that a lot, Bjorn. The light of a love being murdered by shadows. It certainly can happen! Thank you for sharing your insights! :-)

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  6. Arcadia Maria Avatar
    Arcadia Maria

    I like how you used eclipse to describe the things that get in the way in life. Nicely done.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Arcadia Maria. I appreciate your dropping by & commenting. :-)

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  7. Lona Gynt Avatar
    Lona Gynt

    The circling of heavenly bodies, the pull of gravity, the care for offspring… it’s a puzzle. Nice poem Susan, full of weight and measure.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Lona. I like your take on my poem. :-)

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  8. Grace Avatar
    Grace

    I like the changed from heavenly objects to the life back in earth, our reality. I hope the journey together yield fruits that all parties can enjoy.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks so much, Grace. I hope so too.

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  9. navasolanature Avatar
    navasolanature

    Yes, definitely reality here with the unrelenting nature of close relationships and an eclipse! Great poem..

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, NavasolaNature! :-)

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