aka, The Abject Muse

Evicting Earl

Today’s poetry form over at the dVerse Poets Pub, is the dizain.

You’re truly not the guy you used to be

And I’m not the girl I was yesterday.

But what do you see when you look at me?

Saggy, wrinkled skin? Thinning hair of gray?

You don’t have time to look at me these days —

All your drinking and sneaking and lying!

In your sleep it’s her name you’ve been sighing.

So pack up your stuff and hit the road, Earl!

Loser, please: it’s too late to start crying.

Have a nice life, you and that skanky girl!

 

 

SusanWritesPrecise/Susan Marie Shuman
menwhobelieve.com

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29 responses to “Evicting Earl”

  1. msjadeli Avatar
    msjadeli

    “Loser, please” So vibrant and hilarious. The picture is perfect to go with it :)

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks, msjadeli. So glad you enjoyed!

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      1. msjadeli Avatar
        msjadeli

        Oh I did! lol You are welcome.

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  2. Glenn A. Buttkus Avatar
    Glenn A. Buttkus

    Anybody named Earl is suspect. Wow, a rollicking in-the-moment stream-of-consciousness gem.You sublimated the form to interesting content.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks so much, Glenn. Much appreciated!

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  3. Charmed Chaos Avatar
    Charmed Chaos

    OMG- Love this! Reminded me of my favorite Dixie Chicks Song! https://youtu.be/Gw7gNf_9njs

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Exactly! Once that name came to mind, I had to use it. Just too perfect. :-)

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      1. Charmed Chaos Avatar
        Charmed Chaos

        😊

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  4. Rosemary Nissen-Wade Avatar
    Rosemary Nissen-Wade

    Ha, what fun! ‘Hit the Road, Jack’ has long been one of my favourite songs. You take that mood to a new level, with all the accusing details. Bravo!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks so much, Rosemary! It’s an honor.

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  5. Frank Hubeny Avatar
    Frank Hubeny

    I liked the photo of what I assume is Earl’s hit-the-road car.

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  6. Arcadia Maria Avatar
    Arcadia Maria

    Haha. That picture really pops out underneath that poem. Loved the closing lines.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      So glad you enjoyed, Arcadia. Thanks for stopping by!

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  7. Ayala Zarf Avatar
    Ayala Zarf

    The photo is perfect for this poem.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      :-)

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  8. robtkistner Avatar
    robtkistner

    Burn that fool right outta’ your life Susan. The scoundrel and his skank! I absolutely LOVE that picture!! :-) …wonderful write!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Hee! LOL, Rob. Thanks so much!

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      1. gillena cox Avatar
        gillena cox

        His sighing loss. Nice one Susan

        Much❤love

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  9. areadingwriter Avatar
    areadingwriter

    Oh!!! That final act of defiance! Love this!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks so much!

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  10. kim881 Avatar
    kim881

    I love the almost comical assonance in the title, Susan, and the defiant tone of the piece. The final line says it all!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks, Kim. It was a fun write, once I got into it. Glad you enjoyed!

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  11. Xan Avatar
    Xan

    Can I send this to my ex? Thanks for a great laugh.

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  12. The Abject Muse Avatar
    The Abject Muse

    You certainly can! I’m glad it made you laugh. :-)

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  13. Sabio Lantz Avatar
    Sabio Lantz

    Ouch, another end-of-love poem — Rob wrote one too. The form fits it well

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  14. The Abject Muse Avatar
    The Abject Muse

    I think just about any form works well for end-of-love. :-)

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  15. sarahsouthwest Avatar
    sarahsouthwest

    Well, this made me smile. Love that sassy voice!

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  16. mhmp77 Avatar
    mhmp77

    kaykuala

    Yes, Susan let him be with his girl.. They deserve each other!

    Hank

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      True!

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