Evicting Earl

Today’s poetry form over at the dVerse Poets Pub, is the dizain.


You’re truly not the guy you used to be

And I’m not the girl I was yesterday.

But what do you see when you look at me?

Saggy, wrinkled skin? Thinning hair of gray?

You don’t have time to look at me these days —

All your drinking and sneaking and lying!

In your sleep it’s her name you’ve been sighing.

So pack up your stuff and hit the road, Earl!

Loser, please: it’s too late to start crying.

Have a nice life, you and that skanky girl!

 

 

SusanWritesPrecise/Susan Marie Shuman
menwhobelieve.com

29 responses to “Evicting Earl”

  1. “Loser, please” So vibrant and hilarious. The picture is perfect to go with it :)

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    1. Thanks, msjadeli. So glad you enjoyed!

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      1. Oh I did! lol You are welcome.

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  2. Glenn A. Buttkus Avatar
    Glenn A. Buttkus

    Anybody named Earl is suspect. Wow, a rollicking in-the-moment stream-of-consciousness gem.You sublimated the form to interesting content.

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    1. Thanks so much, Glenn. Much appreciated!

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  3. OMG- Love this! Reminded me of my favorite Dixie Chicks Song! https://youtu.be/Gw7gNf_9njs

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    1. Exactly! Once that name came to mind, I had to use it. Just too perfect. :-)

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  4. Ha, what fun! ‘Hit the Road, Jack’ has long been one of my favourite songs. You take that mood to a new level, with all the accusing details. Bravo!

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    1. Thanks so much, Rosemary! It’s an honor.

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  5. I liked the photo of what I assume is Earl’s hit-the-road car.

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  6. Haha. That picture really pops out underneath that poem. Loved the closing lines.

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    1. So glad you enjoyed, Arcadia. Thanks for stopping by!

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  7. The photo is perfect for this poem.

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  8. Burn that fool right outta’ your life Susan. The scoundrel and his skank! I absolutely LOVE that picture!! :-) …wonderful write!

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    1. Hee! LOL, Rob. Thanks so much!

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      1. gillena cox Avatar
        gillena cox

        His sighing loss. Nice one Susan

        Much❤love

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  9. Oh!!! That final act of defiance! Love this!

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    1. Thanks so much!

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  10. I love the almost comical assonance in the title, Susan, and the defiant tone of the piece. The final line says it all!

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    1. Thanks, Kim. It was a fun write, once I got into it. Glad you enjoyed!

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  11. Can I send this to my ex? Thanks for a great laugh.

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  12. You certainly can! I’m glad it made you laugh. :-)

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  13. Ouch, another end-of-love poem — Rob wrote one too. The form fits it well

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  14. I think just about any form works well for end-of-love. :-)

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  15. Well, this made me smile. Love that sassy voice!

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  16. kaykuala

    Yes, Susan let him be with his girl.. They deserve each other!

    Hank

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