Ergo, the Ogre

A large, sprawling oak tree with thick branches covered in green moss, surrounded by lush greenery in a natural setting.

It’s Poetics Tuesday over at the dVerse Poets Pub. Tonight our mission is to write a NONET – a nine line poem that begins with 9 syllables, descending line by line to 1 syllable.
Select ONE of these 9 syllable lines as your opener (or more if you wish to write several nonets)

  • It seems as though you are still summer (cite Merwin)
  • Broken shadows across the cracked ground (cite Merwin)
  • The earthed lightning of a flock of swans (cite Heaney)
  • One side is wild with foam and glitter (cite Heaney)

I chose the second line, by William Stanley Merwin.

Broken shadows across the cracked ground

a monotone jigsaw puzzle

missing one cold, jagged piece

to complete the picture.

Rather than question,

most remain safe

within their

comfort

zone.

 

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Susan Marie Shuman is an author and freelance writer/editor who currently resides in the wilds of Birmingham, AL. She shares her life with two spoiled cats, several friends (not all of them imaginary) and one husband. When she’s not working, Susan enjoys horseback riding, reading, taking her cats for a spin in their pet stroller, and taking naps. An ex-bartender, recovering crash test dummy, and all-around late bloomer, Susan graduated from the University of South Alabama in 2004 with a BA in English. She minored in Russian. Long-range goals include visiting Israel, the Czech Republic and Liechtenstein. Susan is also planning to launch a micronation which would be called either Suzannistan or Eastern Suzanorovia.

8 responses to “Cold, Jagged, Piece”

  1. Dora Avatar
    Dora

    The “cold jagged piece” is a brilliant metaphor for a painful intrusion into comfort zones.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thanks so much, Dora. I hadn’t looked at it that way, but you are exactly right!

      Reply
  2. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    It’s too easy to remain in your comfort zone rather question why the fires are burning.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      True, unfortunately.

      Reply
  3. Helen Dehner Avatar
    Helen Dehner

    It seems we must remain within our comfort zones these days …. lovely writing.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Thank you, Helen. :-)

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  4. Laura Bloomsbury Avatar
    Laura Bloomsbury

    a telling undercurrent under that cracked ground!

    “missing one cold, jagged piece
    to complete the picture.”

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
      The Abject Muse

      Indeed there is! Thanks for stopping by, Laura!

      Reply

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