For Some

It’s Poetics Tuesday over at the dVerse Poets Pub. The challenge is to write a poem in the first person that compares some trait of ours with something animal. It should not be a whale, but another creature (mammal, fish, bird, insect, etc.) with which we have something in common. The title should be the animal thing, in the same way Marjorie Saiser chose ‘The Print the Whales Make’.

For some, love is like

the fog — sneaking in on

tiny kitten paws.

Gently, sweetly almost

apologetically.

For others, love comes

slow and steady like

a pair of oxen

fettered together for

the long haul.

Nondescript, dependable

Predictable.

But for me,

for me love comes

screaming in

like a Spanish bull.

Wild, sinful thunder

Deliciously uncontrollable —

A splendid conflagration —

Dead on legit.


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15 responses to “For Some”

  1. newepicauthor Avatar

    Very nice Susan.

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  2. Evan Schleicher Avatar

    Dead on legit poem!

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  3. sanaarizvi Avatar
    sanaarizvi

    “love comes screaming in like a Spanish bull,”… yes! Exquisitely woven! 💝💝

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  4. kim881 Avatar

    You captured love in all its shapes and sizes in this poem, Susan, from gentle, almost apologetic fog on its ‘tiny kitten paws’ to a Spanish bull ‘screaming in’. I’m not sure which I prefer, but I do appreciate the steadiness of ‘a pair of oxen fettered together for the long haul’, which I know my marriage has become. However, sometimes I dream about a ‘splendid conflagration’. 😊

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Kim. Love offers something for everyone, I guess. So glad you enjoyed!

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  5. Ingrid Avatar

    I love your description of a wild, unbridled, passionate form of love:

    ‘screaming in
    like a Spanish bull.
    Wild, sinful thunder
    Deliciously uncontrollable —
    A splendid conflagration —’

    Ole!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Ingrid!

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  6. abigfatcanofworms Avatar

    Wow! It thunders home! I love the conviction and the intensity!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thanks so much! Intensity is what I was after. :-)

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  7. Susan St.Pierre Avatar

    “Deliciously uncontrollable” is an appealingly freeing phrase! Well done.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Susan. Much appreciated!

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  8. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    I love those aspects of love…. starting with those gentle paws and ending with that passionate raging bull.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Bjorn! :-)

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  9. robtkistner Avatar

    The variations herein are engaging Susan. Love, and how we give and receive love, vary based on the overall situation — each is different, each is fascinating.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Agreed, rob. Thanks so much!

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