Today at the dVerse Poets Pub, we are to write a poem about anticipation, waiting, or hoping.


Delicate snowflakes swirl

and sparkle in mid-day sun,

dusting her feathers a

diaphanous silver glaze.

among the frozen foliage

her mate finds her

and gently shields her with a

massive wing

puzzled as the snow

where she lie turns pink, then red

he huddles closer

and waits. He waits for

a heartbeat, a flinch

a breath, a sound —

any sign of life.

Still, he stays

and he waits with

a protective wing

over her lifeless body.

Never leaving

as the sun sets

and the snow keeps falling.

 

 

25 responses to “A Broken Heart”

  1. mhmp77 Avatar
    mhmp77

    kaykuala

    and he waits with a protective wing
    over her lifeless body. Never leaving

    Where love persists even little animals or birds are bound by instinct to extend a helping hand not really knowing the consequences. Humans fail to learn from the animal world! Wonderful write Susan!

    Hank

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Hank. It broke my heart to write it. We could learn a lot from the animals, but it seems we choose not to. At least some of us.

  2. slfuchs Avatar

    Exquisitely sensitive an dheart grabbing, Susan Marie! No wonder it has gone viral!

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Stephen. I’m glad you enjoyed.

  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    I like the sadness in this… heart breaks in that final parting…

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thanks, Bjorn. It sure does.

  4. Rob Kistner Avatar
    Rob Kistner

    This is well written Susan . A fascinating form of waiting. Waiting on signs of life.

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you so much, Rob!

  5. Linda Lee Lyberg Avatar

    Oh, how sad this is. But it is so beautiful too.

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Many thanks, Linda.

  6. rivrvlogr Avatar

    This glimpse of loss touches the heart.

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, rivrvlogr. Much appreciated.

  7. sarahsouthwest Avatar

    I could see this as a film, or a watercolour painting. It’s so delicately done. The snow adds so much to the desolation.

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Wow. Thank you so much, sarahsouthwest. What a lovely compliment! :-)

  8. kim881 Avatar

    The opening stanza sets the scene beautifully, Susan, and by the third stanza my heart was broken. Delicately done.

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thanks so much, Kim. I appreciate the feedback. I wasn’t sure if this one made it or not. :-)

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar
  9. Frank Hubeny Avatar

    I like your description of faithfulness in the falling snow.

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Frank! :-)

  10. rothpoetry Avatar

    A really great poem!

  11. Truedessa Avatar

    That is so beautifully sad! I can picture the whole event.

    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Truedessa.

  12. msjadeli Avatar

    heart-wrenching, Susan. The ache that will never end.

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