SusanWritesPrecise

A Broken Heart

Today at the dVerse Poets Pub, we are to write a poem about anticipation, waiting, or hoping.


Delicate snowflakes swirl

and sparkle in mid-day sun,

dusting her feathers a

diaphanous silver glaze.

among the frozen foliage

her mate finds her

and gently shields her with a

massive wing

puzzled as the snow

where she lie turns pink, then red

he huddles closer

and waits. He waits for

a heartbeat, a flinch

a breath, a sound —

any sign of life.

Still, he stays

and he waits with

a protective wing

over her lifeless body.

Never leaving

as the sun sets

and the snow keeps falling.

 

 

25 responses to “A Broken Heart”

  1. heart-wrenching, Susan. The ache that will never end.

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  2. That is so beautifully sad! I can picture the whole event.

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    1. Thank you, Truedessa.

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  3. A really great poem!

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  4. I like your description of faithfulness in the falling snow.

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    1. Thank you, Frank! :-)

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  5. The opening stanza sets the scene beautifully, Susan, and by the third stanza my heart was broken. Delicately done.

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    1. Thanks so much, Kim. I appreciate the feedback. I wasn’t sure if this one made it or not. :-)

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  6. I could see this as a film, or a watercolour painting. It’s so delicately done. The snow adds so much to the desolation.

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    1. Wow. Thank you so much, sarahsouthwest. What a lovely compliment! :-)

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  7. This glimpse of loss touches the heart.

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    1. Thank you, rivrvlogr. Much appreciated.

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  8. Oh, how sad this is. But it is so beautiful too.

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    1. Many thanks, Linda.

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    Rob Kistner

    This is well written Susan . A fascinating form of waiting. Waiting on signs of life.

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    1. Thank you so much, Rob!

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  10. I like the sadness in this… heart breaks in that final parting…

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    1. Thanks, Bjorn. It sure does.

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  11. Exquisitely sensitive an dheart grabbing, Susan Marie! No wonder it has gone viral!

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    1. Thank you, Stephen. I’m glad you enjoyed.

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  12. kaykuala

    and he waits with a protective wing
    over her lifeless body. Never leaving

    Where love persists even little animals or birds are bound by instinct to extend a helping hand not really knowing the consequences. Humans fail to learn from the animal world! Wonderful write Susan!

    Hank

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    1. Thank you, Hank. It broke my heart to write it. We could learn a lot from the animals, but it seems we choose not to. At least some of us.

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