SusanWritesPrecise

A Broken Heart

Today at the dVerse Poets Pub, we are to write a poem about anticipation, waiting, or hoping.


Delicate snowflakes swirl

and sparkle in mid-day sun,

dusting her feathers a

diaphanous silver glaze.

among the frozen foliage

her mate finds her

and gently shields her with a

massive wing

puzzled as the snow

where she lie turns pink, then red

he huddles closer

and waits. He waits for

a heartbeat, a flinch

a breath, a sound —

any sign of life.

Still, he stays

and he waits with

a protective wing

over her lifeless body.

Never leaving

as the sun sets

and the snow keeps falling.

 

 


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25 responses to “A Broken Heart”

  1. msjadeli Avatar

    heart-wrenching, Susan. The ache that will never end.

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  2. Truedessa Avatar

    That is so beautifully sad! I can picture the whole event.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Truedessa.

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  3. rothpoetry Avatar

    A really great poem!

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  4. Frank Hubeny Avatar

    I like your description of faithfulness in the falling snow.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Frank! :-)

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  5. kim881 Avatar

    The opening stanza sets the scene beautifully, Susan, and by the third stanza my heart was broken. Delicately done.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thanks so much, Kim. I appreciate the feedback. I wasn’t sure if this one made it or not. :-)

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  6. sarahsouthwest Avatar

    I could see this as a film, or a watercolour painting. It’s so delicately done. The snow adds so much to the desolation.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Wow. Thank you so much, sarahsouthwest. What a lovely compliment! :-)

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  7. rivrvlogr Avatar

    This glimpse of loss touches the heart.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, rivrvlogr. Much appreciated.

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  8. Linda Lee Lyberg Avatar

    Oh, how sad this is. But it is so beautiful too.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Many thanks, Linda.

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  9. Rob Kistner Avatar
    Rob Kistner

    This is well written Susan . A fascinating form of waiting. Waiting on signs of life.

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you so much, Rob!

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  10. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    I like the sadness in this… heart breaks in that final parting…

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thanks, Bjorn. It sure does.

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  11. slfuchs Avatar

    Exquisitely sensitive an dheart grabbing, Susan Marie! No wonder it has gone viral!

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Stephen. I’m glad you enjoyed.

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  12. mhmp77 Avatar
    mhmp77

    kaykuala

    and he waits with a protective wing
    over her lifeless body. Never leaving

    Where love persists even little animals or birds are bound by instinct to extend a helping hand not really knowing the consequences. Humans fail to learn from the animal world! Wonderful write Susan!

    Hank

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    1. The Abject Muse Avatar

      Thank you, Hank. It broke my heart to write it. We could learn a lot from the animals, but it seems we choose not to. At least some of us.

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